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@Kyle:
I see how I could have improved, and it looks a bit better than when I first typed it.
You would assume too much when you think I'm not an avid reader. I love reading, I try to read as much as I can. I'm currently reading 'Odd Thomas' by Dean Koontz. So I'm an avid reader who is still a bit new at writing. (I only started a few years ago. Reading on the other hand, I have read since I was at a young age. Most likely five or six. Which is earlier than most of the kids at school.)
@Skull:
AS I stated, I am inexperienced. Your... Correction? Attempt at helping me? wasn't very good. It's uneven at the best of times and has punctuation where it isn't needed. It also takes out the fact that Emily wears makeup. I appreciate the help, but it won't help all that much.
*Edit* I used the name Jack because it was simple and fit him perfectly. I could have used a long and complex name like, to name a few, Erintor or Sirroc. (Two names that pop up in my Amulet books (Third series).
@YeOldToast:
Yours was the most amusing I have seen so far. With the Prologue, you took some of the important elements and added on to it. At the part where Charles Ford was attacked by the strange creature, you implied that he was killed. I never said he would be killed, leaving those who read it in a state of suspense about his fate. The last part, where you said it received a nickname of 'Death Falls', Erin's mother would have never moved to a town named 'Death Falls', which would mean he would have never came there and there would be no stories. If you read further, to the point of Detective Julius Anderson, you'll notice that there would always be a missing person's report once a month, for a year, every year, and for a length of time. That would be long enough for a person who isn't paying a lot of attention to the local gossip or news to not notice something was amiss. (Well, that's the state of things in my neighborhood. Everyone knows that something happened, and after a while it's forgotten until another thing happens.)
I see how I could have improved, and it looks a bit better than when I first typed it.
You would assume too much when you think I'm not an avid reader. I love reading, I try to read as much as I can. I'm currently reading 'Odd Thomas' by Dean Koontz. So I'm an avid reader who is still a bit new at writing. (I only started a few years ago. Reading on the other hand, I have read since I was at a young age. Most likely five or six. Which is earlier than most of the kids at school.)
@Skull:
AS I stated, I am inexperienced. Your... Correction? Attempt at helping me? wasn't very good. It's uneven at the best of times and has punctuation where it isn't needed. It also takes out the fact that Emily wears makeup. I appreciate the help, but it won't help all that much.
*Edit* I used the name Jack because it was simple and fit him perfectly. I could have used a long and complex name like, to name a few, Erintor or Sirroc. (Two names that pop up in my Amulet books (Third series).
@YeOldToast:
Yours was the most amusing I have seen so far. With the Prologue, you took some of the important elements and added on to it. At the part where Charles Ford was attacked by the strange creature, you implied that he was killed. I never said he would be killed, leaving those who read it in a state of suspense about his fate. The last part, where you said it received a nickname of 'Death Falls', Erin's mother would have never moved to a town named 'Death Falls', which would mean he would have never came there and there would be no stories. If you read further, to the point of Detective Julius Anderson, you'll notice that there would always be a missing person's report once a month, for a year, every year, and for a length of time. That would be long enough for a person who isn't paying a lot of attention to the local gossip or news to not notice something was amiss. (Well, that's the state of things in my neighborhood. Everyone knows that something happened, and after a while it's forgotten until another thing happens.)
