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The reason I used 'take a dump' was because I'm trying to get people to understand the characters a bit better.
For dialogue, I try to make it as natural as possible. I don't want to bore people with; '"How are you doing" Jack said, "Good." Jill said. "Interesting weather." Jack said.' and have a whole line of he said/she said over and over and over again. I make sure people know dialogue is set and have it go on naturally.
(Example: "How are you doing?" Jack asked with a warm smile. "Good." Jill said as she pushed her golden bangs away from her eyes. "Interesting weather." Jack said, talking his eyes off her. "Yeah. Anything new planned?" "Nope, just playing video games at my house. Wanna come?" Jill nodded.)
I cannot possibly have a dialogue where there's one sentence of spoken word and a few lines of description of the surrounding area. Nobody really cares if Jill's bangs are giving Jack urges. (And if they do care, I don't think I want them reading my books.) If there's dialogue, it's going to be uninterrupted by description that takes away from the seriousness of the conversation. I would eventually get bored using a few pages just to write what could be wrapped up in one page.
With the Prologue, I was getting people into the story by starting with something suspenseful. You don't need to read 'The year was 1952 and Charles Ford was being chased by a large, obscenely furry creature.' That's the start of a 'What the hell is this crap?!' reaction. I've noticed that people hate boring beginnings, so I give them something to enjoy before giving them the boring part. Y'know, start with a bit of action then work on the rising action.
As for working on my writing skills, I do that every day.
For dialogue, I try to make it as natural as possible. I don't want to bore people with; '"How are you doing" Jack said, "Good." Jill said. "Interesting weather." Jack said.' and have a whole line of he said/she said over and over and over again. I make sure people know dialogue is set and have it go on naturally.
(Example: "How are you doing?" Jack asked with a warm smile. "Good." Jill said as she pushed her golden bangs away from her eyes. "Interesting weather." Jack said, talking his eyes off her. "Yeah. Anything new planned?" "Nope, just playing video games at my house. Wanna come?" Jill nodded.)
I cannot possibly have a dialogue where there's one sentence of spoken word and a few lines of description of the surrounding area. Nobody really cares if Jill's bangs are giving Jack urges. (And if they do care, I don't think I want them reading my books.) If there's dialogue, it's going to be uninterrupted by description that takes away from the seriousness of the conversation. I would eventually get bored using a few pages just to write what could be wrapped up in one page.
With the Prologue, I was getting people into the story by starting with something suspenseful. You don't need to read 'The year was 1952 and Charles Ford was being chased by a large, obscenely furry creature.' That's the start of a 'What the hell is this crap?!' reaction. I've noticed that people hate boring beginnings, so I give them something to enjoy before giving them the boring part. Y'know, start with a bit of action then work on the rising action.
As for working on my writing skills, I do that every day.
