The Dink Network

@krissknox
as far as i can see
kyle's suggestions are a very good idea
the will change your writing alot
and trust me i am a book addict if its fantasy I MUST HAVE IT
however,i am an inexperienced writer

anyway as far as i have seen kyle's words are true

i HATE reading a page and then not understanding and having to go back
it MURDERS my imaginary world

bad examples
harry potter books
i have read all of them and really dislike the way they can confuse one
however,i did read them all because of one thing
STORY
if a book has a good plot and story no matter how many mistakes are made
they are read

good examples
umm,the red pyramid (a small bit but not to much)(this is what i mean by good plot and story i almost hated the way the book was written (it was confusing) but i liked it)
the best books i have read so far is the percy jakson series
try them the might help

@skull
know that you have been beaten by kyle in this matter
GIVE UP