The Dink Network

I am someone without a present or future. I'm only a past. In my previous mission to the most scary places on this world i was the only one that managed keep its cool. Some said that i stole the sanity of the other and gave it to myself. That's how i earned the name Sanity.

i just started an dmod with Sanity as a hero but i want to know what do you think of his introduction?(this is in for minor changes)
but anyhow what do you think?

nice. a little more doomy-gloomy insanity might be fun, and perhaps a little insight on the whos, whats, wheres, and whys, But maintaining the sense of suspense. <Ahem, that hurts!>

ok i'll make an extended version but that could take a while(even though i write as i go(rewriting section reading if it's up to my standards rewriting some more etc. etc.))

coolies. If you're thinking about building on the story/making a series, put a fair bit of effort into the Background/History of the storyline-it really pays off!

i could make this a series if enough modders to help me on it. one of my strengths on modding is plotlines so the story of it should be no problem. adn my scripting abilities aren't half bad either but i cant sy teire good either(still don't know that much of dinkc).
and my skills at graphics are below zero(i think series need new graphics). so if anyone is willing t help i might make this a series.

It sounds fun. Im making my first ever Dmod for the comp currently (though id be surprised if its finished in time) and've been toying around with mixing graphics in there. my main strength is probably grammar n spelling. i can word stuff good (if its worth it!) but with teams, u just gotta stick at it or it'll go shathouse.

i could use someone in grammar(english isn't my own language).
but i need more help if it'l become a series.

but anyhoo here is the extended version(plotlineish:
I'm someone with no present or future. i'm just a past.
My surname is Sir Frederik Madwood. I used to serve under the previous king Goodhearth. I was sent on mission to the scariest missions but i was te only one able to keep its cool. one of those missions was to the haunted forest of Kwarkness. in it where ghosts that represent the biggest fears known to man. beats that where so ferocius that Slayers seem like lapdogs. yet other creatures could breathe so hot fire that dragon flames feel like icecubes. And yet even other beasts had such thick hides that Stone giants seem like paper defense holders. And those where the weaklings. The first few meters went ok but then those cowards ran away and i was on my own. I only could hear them scream good luck Sanity. I pressed on walked in the forest for hours. staying calm as ever. after i got the item needed. i went back. when i left the forest. the others went nuts. and started screaming inunderstandable stuff. the only words i could grasp where Sanity give back our Sanity. The few still sane knights went back with me. at the castle they did the report where i was banished from the kingdom. with only my armor and my axe. And the name Sanity. Now i'm walking the lands and trying to find a place to call home.

i hope you like it.

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My surname is Sir Frederik Madwood. I used to serve under the previous ruler, King Goodheart. I was sent on mission to the scariest missions but i was the only one able to keep my cool.

One of those missions was to the haunted forest of Kwarkness. In it were ghosts that represent the biggest fears known to man, beasts that where so ferocious that Slayers seem like lapdogs, other creatures that could breathe fire so hot that dragon flames feel like icecubes in comparison.
And yet even other beasts had such thick hides that Stone giants seem like paper defense holders. And those were the weaklings.

The first few meters went ok but then those cowards ran away and i was on my own. I only could hear them scream "Good luck Sanity!"

I pressed on, walking in the forest for hours, staying as calm as possible. After I got the item needed, I went back.

When I left the forest, the others went nuts, and started screaming unintelligibly, the only words I could grasp being;
"Sanity! Give back our Sanity!".
The few still sane knights went back with me, at the castle they did the report where I was banished from the kingdom with only my armor and my axe. And the name Sanity.
Now I'm walking the lands and trying to find a place to call home.

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Corrected a lot of it, but there are still a few phrasing errors I couldn't decide how to rephrase.
Also, things in Italics could use revising plot-wise, because of plot-holes and confusion as well as the exact point you're trying to get across.

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My name is Sir Frederik Madwood. I used to serve under the previous ruler, King Goodheart. I was sent on the most dangerous missions but I was the only one able to keep my cool.

One of those missions was to the haunted forest of Kwarkness. In it were ghosts that represented the biggest fears known to man, beasts that were so ferocious that Slayers seemed like lapdogs, other creatures that could breathe fire so hot that dragon flames felt like ice cubes in comparison.
And yet other beasts had such thick hides that Stone giants' hides seemed like paper. And those were the weaklings.

The first few metres went okay, but then those cowards ran away and I was on my own. I could only hear them scream "Good luck Sanity!"

I pressed on, walking in the forest for hours, staying as calm as possible. After I found the item that we needed to bring back, I went back.

When I left the forest, the others went nuts, and started screaming unintelligibly, the only words I could grasp being;
"Sanity! Give back our Sanity!".
The few still sane knights went back with me where at the castle they gave the report which caused the ruler to give the order to banish me. I was banished from the kingdom with only my armour and my axe. And the name Sanity.
Now I'm walking the lands and trying to find a place to call home.

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I think I've fixed it up a bit more.

thanks for the grammar cleanup(I'm dutch so English grammar isn't the best). but besides that i need a lot more help(graphics plenty of scripting(i'l do the most but fine tuning there will be needed). anyway i hope that there will be plenty of interest in this project(which might become a series)

Sanity is my name, and sanity is my game. I live live by the motto: "Never turn back - that which lurks behind you will flay your mind and rob your' sanity".
I have lost many friends to fear. They see things stalking through the forests and they flee in terror, yet even as they turn tail, that which they fear seems to slither into their souls and feast on all thats is logical and pure.

i sofar have exactly 5 screens.
1 for the text only intro.
the second is the throne room where you start the
adventure.

and the other 3 are the castle outside.

good boy. keep it up and don't forget to try to sneak some randomness and humour between those deep and grisly themes!

i will but i hope you have the same sense of humour i put in the game. and i'll make it so that if you go looking for it you'll miss it.

schweet! sounds like a plan