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MWAAA! *plants alcohol-reeking kiss on krisknox' tender lil' cheeks* Have at thee! Avante garde, are you? I don't mind.
All I'm saying is that I, PERSONALLY think you could work on better linguistics - Eg. "I fell to the ground" - assuming he passed out, how would he know?!
"i was SO freaked out, that I could see the world spinning" - I reckon go with something more chilling - "Sheer terror struck me, the world seemed to spin from beneath me"
BUT as I said, it's YOUR' work. Let criticism be your' Stollen and Schnapps.
And yes, I do like IRREGULAR "TERMONOLOGY" from MEDIEVAL TIMES!
All I'm saying is that I, PERSONALLY think you could work on better linguistics - Eg. "I fell to the ground" - assuming he passed out, how would he know?!
"i was SO freaked out, that I could see the world spinning" - I reckon go with something more chilling - "Sheer terror struck me, the world seemed to spin from beneath me"
BUT as I said, it's YOUR' work. Let criticism be your' Stollen and Schnapps.
And yes, I do like IRREGULAR "TERMONOLOGY" from MEDIEVAL TIMES!
