The Dink Network

Very atmospheric. I especially liked the second story; I was wondering if it was going anywhere or just describing life in the city, but the twist/revelation made it all the more worthwhile.

To criticize, there's something that slightly bothers me about the way you describe things, especially in the first story. I can't precisely put my finger on it, but it's probably the amount of description/the way you do it, e.g: "Masked figures climbed tall stepladders, pouring noxious chemicals into wide brass vats, stirring the moiling ichor with great iron paddles," -- it's always <descriptor> <thing>, and a little much so many times in a row. Instead it could be something like "Masked figures climbed stepladders arching high into the dim ceiling, pouring noxious chemicals into brass vats so massive that three fire boncas could have used them as a luxurious yacuzzi, stirring the moiling ichor with great iron paddles," or something. Sometimes, I think plain less description could work better too, e.g. "thick tanned leather harnesses" is a terrible mouthful.