Wrath_of_a_God
dinks aunt dies he is now alone in the world
NO
dink discovers he has a sister but his sister was taken as at a young age and has been trained to be a ^^^ ^^^
he saves his sister and tells her the truth about her true identity
she gives him her necklace the last symbol of their ((()))
who is a *_*
the ^^^ discover this and kidnap his sister to take the :::::: she obtained from her ((()))
they think she is the /\
now dink must quest to find his sister and a waken his true as the *** of a *_* power
NO
dink discovers he has a sister but his sister was taken as at a young age and has been trained to be a ^^^ ^^^
he saves his sister and tells her the truth about her true identity
she gives him her necklace the last symbol of their ((()))
who is a *_*
the ^^^ discover this and kidnap his sister to take the :::::: she obtained from her ((()))
they think she is the /\
now dink must quest to find his sister and a waken his true as the *** of a *_* power
;(
*sob* why dont i just die *sob*
*sob* kill me *sob*
*sob* why dont i just die *sob*
*sob* kill me *sob*
I would if I just wasn't too lazy to get there.
Nail some boards to it and actually make it drivable and people will drive it
well actully there is alot more i am just to lazy to type it all down
hmm........how about making this a non-combat
i know it sucks but thats because you do not know
who or what is ((()))
who or what is ((()))
Horrible.
Honestly; Censoring out where words should be using symbols and such won't make anyone interested. It explains nothing about how you plan to create a storyline and makes it sound even more cliche.
What you need to do is MUCH better explain what you're talking about. Replace all of those silly symbols which actual words, give us a basic or explained description as to what the words are if they're not from the English we all know today. Is Dink evil or good? We still don't know after reading that. Was it the police or government who kidnapped his sister? Or the Cast, or goblins? Again, you explain nothing. She is that... what? You explain nothing. Chosen? Destined? Cursed? Blessed? Once again, you know what I'm talking about.
What's worse than this? To be honest it's the fact that we haven't got a clue what you're trying to sell us here. A storyline you're planning for a Dmod is the obvious guess because of the Forum-Thread name and the fact that you've posted the thread as Development, but once again, and even I'm getting sick of saying this word: Nothing is really explained.
Hellfire, I'm only ever going to say this to you once. Try to develop your English typing skills a bit more. I don't know or care how old you might be (from what I can tell you're probably a teenager) but on the Internet, not everyone is going to be able to understand what you're saying if you can't make your point clear. If you speak another language as a primary, translate what you're saying and actually say the words out loud and you'll find that you make very little sense grammatically.
I've lost my train of thought, so before I ramble on about the inequities of modern languages I shall click Submit and move on.
Honestly; Censoring out where words should be using symbols and such won't make anyone interested. It explains nothing about how you plan to create a storyline and makes it sound even more cliche.
What you need to do is MUCH better explain what you're talking about. Replace all of those silly symbols which actual words, give us a basic or explained description as to what the words are if they're not from the English we all know today. Is Dink evil or good? We still don't know after reading that. Was it the police or government who kidnapped his sister? Or the Cast, or goblins? Again, you explain nothing. She is that... what? You explain nothing. Chosen? Destined? Cursed? Blessed? Once again, you know what I'm talking about.
What's worse than this? To be honest it's the fact that we haven't got a clue what you're trying to sell us here. A storyline you're planning for a Dmod is the obvious guess because of the Forum-Thread name and the fact that you've posted the thread as Development, but once again, and even I'm getting sick of saying this word: Nothing is really explained.
Hellfire, I'm only ever going to say this to you once. Try to develop your English typing skills a bit more. I don't know or care how old you might be (from what I can tell you're probably a teenager) but on the Internet, not everyone is going to be able to understand what you're saying if you can't make your point clear. If you speak another language as a primary, translate what you're saying and actually say the words out loud and you'll find that you make very little sense grammatically.
I've lost my train of thought, so before I ramble on about the inequities of modern languages I shall click Submit and move on.
Wow Exdeathevn, that's a useful contribution from you!
I think you're pretty much spot on with your criticism, indeed nothing is explained. You're better off just telling that you're working on a DMOD and you're not yet willing to tell us about the story. But even when you replace all the placeholders it still is a pretty dry summation of events, you need to connect sentences into a story better. A story is more than a list of events!
I've tried to rewrite the story from your basic story: (I'm not a great writer, so don't expect anything fancy.)
"After Dink Aunts dies of a terrible scurvy Dink is alone in the world. Dink goes into a deep depression as his aunt was the only family member left for him. Except...
Dink learns he still has a sister who was trained from a young age to become a professional clown. Luckily for her Dink saves her and tells her about her true identity. She then gives Dink her necklace, the last symbol of their family relation to bishop Nelson. (Who happens to be working as a banana salesman in the greater Goodheart area.)
The ringmaster of a rival circus discovers that Dink's sister has disappeared and kidnaps her so he can make use of her long years of training. But then the ringmaster discovers she has obtained great duck-beheading skill from her family relation to bishop Nelson. He consults bishop Nelson and together they develop a new theory: They believe Dink's sister is the prophesied great beheader of ducks, who will come to avenge the destruction of the duck-cult in Windemere.
Now it's up to Dink to save his sister and awaken his true destiny as banana salesman. Only then can bishop Nelson be defeated once more."
EDIT: Also, you could always tell a little about things beside the story. What is the projected size? When do you think it's going to be done? Is it going to have awesome new monsters? Is it going to have so many riddles that even SimonK would get annoyed? Any new weapons/magic? Any screenshots?
I think you're pretty much spot on with your criticism, indeed nothing is explained. You're better off just telling that you're working on a DMOD and you're not yet willing to tell us about the story. But even when you replace all the placeholders it still is a pretty dry summation of events, you need to connect sentences into a story better. A story is more than a list of events!
I've tried to rewrite the story from your basic story: (I'm not a great writer, so don't expect anything fancy.)
"After Dink Aunts dies of a terrible scurvy Dink is alone in the world. Dink goes into a deep depression as his aunt was the only family member left for him. Except...
Dink learns he still has a sister who was trained from a young age to become a professional clown. Luckily for her Dink saves her and tells her about her true identity. She then gives Dink her necklace, the last symbol of their family relation to bishop Nelson. (Who happens to be working as a banana salesman in the greater Goodheart area.)
The ringmaster of a rival circus discovers that Dink's sister has disappeared and kidnaps her so he can make use of her long years of training. But then the ringmaster discovers she has obtained great duck-beheading skill from her family relation to bishop Nelson. He consults bishop Nelson and together they develop a new theory: They believe Dink's sister is the prophesied great beheader of ducks, who will come to avenge the destruction of the duck-cult in Windemere.
Now it's up to Dink to save his sister and awaken his true destiny as banana salesman. Only then can bishop Nelson be defeated once more."
EDIT: Also, you could always tell a little about things beside the story. What is the projected size? When do you think it's going to be done? Is it going to have awesome new monsters? Is it going to have so many riddles that even SimonK would get annoyed? Any new weapons/magic? Any screenshots?
Am I the only one who was able to fill in most of the symbols in his post then? Or maybe it's just my imagination running wild
But yeah, if you want to be taken seriously, then follow those guidelines
But yeah, if you want to be taken seriously, then follow those guidelines
No, the only one I can guess is ((())). That is probably 'father', if I think the story is as much of a stereotype as I'm afraid it is.
And if I may guess further: :::::: is some sort of amulet or magical object; ^^^ is a priest; *_* is god or something divine; *** is true, destined or something like that and /\ is god/prophet/source of power. But those are just guesses...
And of course I took some more original guesses in my version. Except that I just realized I took 'proffesional clown' for ^^^ the first time and 'The ringmaster of a rival circus' the second time...
And if I may guess further: :::::: is some sort of amulet or magical object; ^^^ is a priest; *_* is god or something divine; *** is true, destined or something like that and /\ is god/prophet/source of power. But those are just guesses...
And of course I took some more original guesses in my version. Except that I just realized I took 'proffesional clown' for ^^^ the first time and 'The ringmaster of a rival circus' the second time...
I took ^^^^ to be a prostitute... It does say Dink SAVES her from her predicament
First step is to learn how to type decent English.
note:
there are 13 gods in this world
3 of which are very powerful
the elite cast are trained in the way of the gods so they have defeated 4 of the 10 minors
they have been able to drain the gods powers and have trapped what was left of these gods in to a pit leading to the void
After Dink Aunts dies the same way his mother,Dink is alone in the world.Dink goes into a deep depression as his aunt was the only family member left for him. Except...
Dink learns he still has a sister who was trained from a young age to become an elite cast mistress.
she must be saved by dink
she then gives Dink her necklace,the last symbol of the the last symbol of their father,Rithem,the God of divine magic,holder of the elements and God of strength.
During her time the elite cast had filled Annabeth ,Dink's sister,with lies.She was told that she was the daughter and sole child of a great cast warrior.
They told her that the necklace was belonged to her mother who died giving birth to her,by her fathers wish it was given to her...but all that did not explain one thing.Annabeth had spacial powers she could mold the water to make floods,she could bend the wind to form tornadoes,her body would go aflame if she was angry,the earth was always by her side.
th elite cast had realized all of these signs
they knew that she was a demigod.
they planned to drain her of her power to re-create their master....seth.
what they did not know is that Rithem had two children
dink and Annabeth
they both share the inherited power but as prophecy foretold
by will of a child of Rithem,seth will rise
by will of a child of Rithem,seth will fall
the choice shall be made
evil shall rise
good shall fall
dink has fought the cast many times
but he has never confronted the elite
EDIT:What is the projected size? epic
When do you think it's going to be done? march 1st 2017
Is it going to have awesome new monsters? not other than the bosses
Is it going to have so many riddles that even SimonK would get annoyed?i plan to
Any new weapons/magic?yes
Any screenshots? what do you mean?
my age
*_*
are you an idiot
GODS ARE IMMORTAL
there are 13 gods in this world
3 of which are very powerful
the elite cast are trained in the way of the gods so they have defeated 4 of the 10 minors
they have been able to drain the gods powers and have trapped what was left of these gods in to a pit leading to the void
After Dink Aunts dies the same way his mother,Dink is alone in the world.Dink goes into a deep depression as his aunt was the only family member left for him. Except...
Dink learns he still has a sister who was trained from a young age to become an elite cast mistress.
she must be saved by dink
she then gives Dink her necklace,the last symbol of the the last symbol of their father,Rithem,the God of divine magic,holder of the elements and God of strength.
During her time the elite cast had filled Annabeth ,Dink's sister,with lies.She was told that she was the daughter and sole child of a great cast warrior.
They told her that the necklace was belonged to her mother who died giving birth to her,by her fathers wish it was given to her...but all that did not explain one thing.Annabeth had spacial powers she could mold the water to make floods,she could bend the wind to form tornadoes,her body would go aflame if she was angry,the earth was always by her side.
th elite cast had realized all of these signs
they knew that she was a demigod.
they planned to drain her of her power to re-create their master....seth.
what they did not know is that Rithem had two children
dink and Annabeth
they both share the inherited power but as prophecy foretold
by will of a child of Rithem,seth will rise
by will of a child of Rithem,seth will fall
the choice shall be made
evil shall rise
good shall fall
dink has fought the cast many times
but he has never confronted the elite
EDIT:What is the projected size? epic
When do you think it's going to be done? march 1st 2017
Is it going to have awesome new monsters? not other than the bosses
Is it going to have so many riddles that even SimonK would get annoyed?i plan to
Any new weapons/magic?yes
Any screenshots? what do you mean?
my age
*_*
are you an idiot
GODS ARE IMMORTAL
Didn't you already when you posted this thread?
Why would you cancel it? I think you're old enough to turn your creative juice into something tangible
Try the d-mod, it's allowed to suck haaaaard on your first (few) tries
Try the d-mod, it's allowed to suck haaaaard on your first (few) tries
You can't really say the premise of an epic is good or bad on this information. It sounds workable, but it all depends on how it is worked out.
I would really advice against making an epic though. It takes a lot of time and is very difficult to finish. Believe me, I've been there. Starting out with smaller DMODs is much better to learn the craft.
Good luck!
I would really advice against making an epic though. It takes a lot of time and is very difficult to finish. Believe me, I've been there. Starting out with smaller DMODs is much better to learn the craft.
Good luck!
how about 3 romps rather than a mega mod
any way i will make a demo see what people think and deiced which of the two
any way i will make a demo see what people think and deiced which of the two
why will this be an epic?
because the elite have the power of 5 Gods
dink cant fight that of so he has to quest for power and
there are 4 types of powers~you can only get one)
and you need to find ....(i dont want to tell that
it would blow away the whole story,you find out in the beginning of the game anyway)
because the elite have the power of 5 Gods
dink cant fight that of so he has to quest for power and
there are 4 types of powers~you can only get one)
and you need to find ....(i dont want to tell that
it would blow away the whole story,you find out in the beginning of the game anyway)
Sure sure, sounds great.
Just rechannel the energy you're using to spam the forum to making the dmod and you'll be finished in no time.
Just rechannel the energy you're using to spam the forum to making the dmod and you'll be finished in no time.
Constant talkingt about it reduces the creative juices, get your head down and into it instead, well said scratcher
i think it will be done February next year no promises though
will upload a demo in a while
will upload a demo in a while
I hope you don't use those symbols in that dialogue.
I'd like to take a moment to thank the admins and ask for thread closure due to the fact that a few people apparently show complete disregard to Hellfire's attempt at a storyline.
As bad as it was to begin with, he at least started to work on it and then everyone went "Looney".
As bad as it was to begin with, he at least started to work on it and then everyone went "Looney".
Why close his thread? I'd feel bad if my development thread was closed
Maybe clean it up instead
Maybe clean it up instead
True.
I would turn Show Deleted Posts off but I leave it on for the lols.
I would turn Show Deleted Posts off but I leave it on for the lols.
well,been a change of plans this is going to be worked on way later so i wont be able to meet the given dates
sorry
sorry