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thomas.kucera@tele2.at
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I like the story very much. Thank you for posting it.

The only thing that took me was the first two sentences:
....as three figures ran through the hallways of Arctica Castle. Escaping the fire that was raging all over the castle, the elder man, along with his three younger companions

Either I didn't understand it right or I am not able to count properly or there is an error hidden here.
In the first part there are three figures mentioned. Afterwards its the elder man plus three companions = four figures.

Edit: In this part I assume a typo "Garrett noticed her. "Elmina!", she shouted."
I think it should be he shouted

Otherwise its really great. I am looking for the next chapters