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Why do the little ones cry in the beginning?
How did Pinnochio get to the door?
Other than that... very interesting
I'm not sure why they see themselves die in the place that they spend the most time, but eh, not really important.
The only real recommendation I have is to maybe consolidate the little ones, the bigger ones, and the biggest ones into seperate characters: one little one, one bigger one, and one biggest one. It seems like you're sort of going for a fairy-tale-like thing though, so that might not be the effect you're looking for.
There don't seem to be that many concrete interesting images either, but I didn't miss them until trying to think of things 'wrong' with it.
How did Pinnochio get to the door?
Other than that... very interesting
I'm not sure why they see themselves die in the place that they spend the most time, but eh, not really important.The only real recommendation I have is to maybe consolidate the little ones, the bigger ones, and the biggest ones into seperate characters: one little one, one bigger one, and one biggest one. It seems like you're sort of going for a fairy-tale-like thing though, so that might not be the effect you're looking for.
There don't seem to be that many concrete interesting images either, but I didn't miss them until trying to think of things 'wrong' with it.
