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Writhing skills

May 9th 2011, 09:35 PM
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Mrgantoe
Peasant He/Him Cuba
I'm simply a distraction. 
I am just curios because I know there are some good wrighters here just post a sample of something you wrote dosnt have to be as big as mine and not as bad I'm not all that good but it kills time.
    Dasbn woke up at the same time as he did every morning.  The sun shone through the window of his humble adobe usually being the cause of his waking but today it was not.  He left out of his cottage without breakfast this morning for there was investigating to do.  He strung his bow and loaded up his quiver pulled his hood over his head.
    He was heading to were he heard a noise that caused him to wake up this morning.  As he neared the spine chilling screams he crouched and strung an arrow.  A clearing was approaching as the appointed ranger of the forest he new the forest very well.  As he came upon the clearing he saw a massive creature lurking over the body of Tim the hunter.
    The monster looked up seeing Dasbn and charged.  Dasbn loosed his arrow and hopped away avoiding the blow by inches.  The creature saw it wasn't a hunter he was facing but one of the kings rangers he reared for one more charge.  Dasbn pulled his throwing knife and got ready.  The monster charged and Dasbn threw the knife which logged itself into the creatures eye.    The monster startled by the sudden pain fled yelling that his master would flame his revenge.
    Dasbn realized the seriousness of the events that have taken place so he returned to his cottage preparing for a long trip to castle Teram.  Dasbn reached his cottage and sat down thinking of what just happened.  He recalled how the monster promised that his master would get revenge.  "how strange thought Dasbn this master can be only one of two people".
    The first person the king of Teram King Daniel or the Master of darkness Grimwald.  Dasbn shuttered at the thought it had been hundreds of years since one of his minions has crossed that danging mountain pass.  He took all that he owned and layer it on the small table.  He also had his bag on the chair   .  He started separating the essentials from the luckshuries.  He took his food,bow,arrows and quiver,cooking utensils,his shortsword, and the clothes on his back.
    He cooked a feast that knight for he wouldn't eat good for awhile.  He had potatos deer and a vintage whiskie from 5081.  He ate ferocesly eating everything he had cooked .  He went to bed sleeping comftarobly living in the moment.  He woke up this morning thankfully to the suns glare not another yell.  He strapped the bag to his bag ate breakfast and left his cottage reluctantly.
    He patrolled threw the forest for the last time silently gliding from tree to tree looking for anything suspicious.  He saw nothing no illegal hunters or bandits.  He was glad that he was leaving the forest on a good note.  Dasbn found the road with ease for he was a kings ranger.  He walked along the road with his bow on his back for he carried no fear with him.
    Although the road seemed surprisingly bare all was normal and the day was good.  He looked down at his feet already covered in dirt from the road.  He set his pace left,right,left,right,left,right and so on he was feeling good and started to hum a ballad of a tale of a great hero Dink smallwood.  Strolled his eyes observant and he saw as far as an eagle he was happy for the first time in a long time.
    He continued walking for an hour or so before he met his first traveler.  The man was a queer fellow with a small build and a lanky figure dressed in scholars robes.  Dasbn and approached him and said "hello" the man jumped and turned around.  Surprised but grateful for the company he returned the favor "hello master Sergius Mage of the Tower.
    "I have heard little of your order master Mage tell me about it" said Dasbn.  The Mage gladly told him the history from when magic was discovered all they way to the defense of castle Teram.  Then the Mage looked at him questioningly.  Dasbn spoke first "ranger of the king at your service".  Ah that solves everything I have heard a lot of your order a brave few are up to your job.  "Yes that is true the job is difficult and at times terrifying" replied Dasbn.
    Well ranger I heard your kind make good company.  Let's hope it is a good time Mage. Yes now it's getting dark now isn't it.  Nothing to be afraid of Mage we will be in a town soon.
May 9th 2011, 11:24 PM
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Not bad! A promising beginning to a story. But where did you get all those periods and commas? I figured your keyboard didn't have those keys.

I loled at your subject line. Writhing skills, eh? XD I'm only good at writhing when I'm in intense pain. I guess I have to be in the right mood.

That brings up an idea I've been toying with about proofreading. I'll make another thread about it so I don't hijack this one.

But yeah, good story. Are you going to continue it?
May 10th 2011, 08:02 AM
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Mrgantoe
Peasant He/Him Cuba
I'm simply a distraction. 
Probaly I'm better at short story's then really long things and I suck with names.
May 10th 2011, 11:30 AM
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Quiztis
Peasant He/Him Sweden bloop
Life? What's that? Can I download it?! 
Hi, spead some , over your tetx and cut down on teh . and look it throuhg one more tiem.

Oh, and check yer spelling.
May 10th 2011, 05:17 PM
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Mrgantoe
Peasant He/Him Cuba
I'm simply a distraction. 
Funny quiztes and thanks for the advice.
May 11th 2011, 06:07 AM
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SabreTrout
Noble He/Him United Kingdom
Tigertigertiger. 
SabreTrout

There was a little SabreTrout,
Who thought he'd smashed a n00b,
But when he checked again that day,
He'd made a terrible boob!

It wasn't a n00b he'd hit, it seemed,
But instead it was his pal!
Not Dan, not Paul, not Kyle, no-no.
Instead, it was Sir Tal!

"Oh, no!" he cried, his brow was wet,
and some other stuff that rhymes.
Oh wait, you want this finished now?
Well sorry, I don't have time.

Fin.

Applause would be appreciated. Thank you.

I am writing a novel too. Tal is not in it.
May 11th 2011, 06:10 AM
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MsDink
Peasant She/Her New Zealand
Tag - Umm.. tag, you're it? 
Whose a smart wee fish then!
May 11th 2011, 06:19 AM
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*claps, whistles, cheers*

Really, that was good.
May 11th 2011, 07:12 AM
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Skull
Peasant He/Him Finland bloop
A Disembodied Sod 
*Applause*

Now go make me a sandwich!
May 11th 2011, 08:02 AM
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Kyle
Peasant He/Him Belgium
 
That was fishalicious
May 11th 2011, 08:17 AM
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Mrgantoe
Peasant He/Him Cuba
I'm simply a distraction. 
Nice never thout that some one would wright a poem it was good and *applaus*
May 11th 2011, 08:26 AM
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Marpro
Peasant He/Him bloop
 
Good stuff.