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Ohhh, shiver. A psychotic seriously alcoholic female serial killer~We need more of those. Women have been under-represented in that field. This is not from real life is it? 
The following comments are nothing against you and really not a critique. They are more like personal impressions. I just didn't like the story and feel that someone else could give a serious helpful appraisal of your writing skills.
Dudette, first off... This was awfully hard to read without spaces. It's not 'cute', it's annoying.
You have a good idea but the story was static. It had no vitality in the interactions of the characters. They seemed flat and boring. Maybe you could make the two protagonists talk to each other instead of relating the events. Redink said, show me, don't tell me. Good advice.
On the better side, I liked the concept. Freaky! You could really do something with a story like this.
On a sidenote: It takes a brave person to put their stories out there in public. I may not care for it but there will be others that do. And it's what you think that counts. There have been dozens of well known people who were told various uncomplimentary things about their work and yet they are now famous. The critic is unknown and unapplauded.
Sorry I'm not more helpful.
Thank you for sharing.
The following comments are nothing against you and really not a critique. They are more like personal impressions. I just didn't like the story and feel that someone else could give a serious helpful appraisal of your writing skills.
Dudette, first off... This was awfully hard to read without spaces. It's not 'cute', it's annoying.
You have a good idea but the story was static. It had no vitality in the interactions of the characters. They seemed flat and boring. Maybe you could make the two protagonists talk to each other instead of relating the events. Redink said, show me, don't tell me. Good advice.
On the better side, I liked the concept. Freaky! You could really do something with a story like this.
On a sidenote: It takes a brave person to put their stories out there in public. I may not care for it but there will be others that do. And it's what you think that counts. There have been dozens of well known people who were told various uncomplimentary things about their work and yet they are now famous. The critic is unknown and unapplauded.
Sorry I'm not more helpful.
Thank you for sharing.
