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April 11th 2005, 10:49 PM
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Of the stories you've posted here, this was the best tale, but the worst execution. The main problem I have with the end is that there isn't enough action to really reveal the protagonist's emotional/mental state. Perhaps he could have some sort of encounter on his way home?

Also, I've managed to go through life without being punched in the face, but I imagine it doesn't quite happen as you describe it.