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Hmm... this started out good, but I don't like the turn it's taken. Everything leading up to this point was good. The setup and suspense were quite well done up to this point where... I am underwhelmed. A lobster creature? It just doesn't seem to fit. Maybe it would be more frightening if I felt more connected to the characters, but ever since that switch from 1st to 3rd person, the story has felt less real, which was its main strong point. It sounded as though someone was actually relating a real life experience. It's near-believability made it interesting and the switch from 1st to 3rd and the lobster thing broke that.
If you want some kind of creature, maybe you could try to do some research into types people have 'seen' before and base it off that lore.
If you want some kind of creature, maybe you could try to do some research into types people have 'seen' before and base it off that lore.
