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"A gentle wind blew past me as I opened my eyes.
I was standing, the darkness of my room an absolute sea of black.
Was I in my room? Perhaps I was in another world, or maybe I was in a dream.
I listened closely. I heard my soft breathing and slowed my breath. Nothing. Then, a dripping sound.
Was it the Kitchen sink? Was it water dripping off a stalactite in an empty cave?
'Where... am I?' I asked myself. I took a step forward, suddenly aware of the soft, yet moist, floor.
I was barefoot. 'Who am I?' I asked suddenly. I knew that in popular culture this would be called Amnesia.
But amnesia was an inability to remember recent events.
'I'm intelligent.' I thought as I took a step forward. Was I in a bedroom, or a cave?
'Priorities.' I thought as I took a silent step forward. 'Location, Orientation, then Identity.'
It was a simple plan. I knelt down and felt the floor.
The floor was very malleable, I could easily tear it apart. Inside I felt worms and bugs of various design.
My stomach growled. 'I'm hungry.' I thought while considering the bugs.
Many were edible, while others were poisonous. Some could cause disease within my body.
'This is a cave.' I thought. A thought occured to me. A blind man's other senses were heightened in compensation for loss of sight.
'Perhaps I am blind, and this cave is well lit.' I thought. I made a click sound and the outlines of various shapes and crevices came to me.
I had 'sight'. I turned around and clicked again. I achieved a similar result. I faced my original direction and saw a subtle light.
I had Sight. I walked forward softly and slowly, clicking when needed. The air went past me once more, drawing me in the direction I walked.
Something clattered against my foot. I bent down and picked the object up.
It was a flashlight. I turned it on, procuring a powerful beam of light.
'If this were a horror game, the light would be weak.' My mind said.
I smiled softly as I walked forward, keeping my light in front of me.
Soon enough, I came to a large cavern. In the center was a large stalagmite.
(Or stalactite, I could never remember which was the one that extended from the floor up.)
Of the stala(ct/gm)ite there were strange symbols that hurt my eyes to look at.
I was aware of a strange song that hurt my ears to hear.
Men in black robes entered the cavern, singing the strange song, through various entrances and exits.
I heard some bits in what came to my ears as English.
"No bells toll for us, nor they do toll for our dead! Cast aside from light..."
The rest transitioned into the hurtful language.
However, I noted the appearance of the men.
They all were blind, their eyes gouged out and filled with wax.
They were deaf, their ears burnt severely and filled with wax.
They could not smell, for their noses were corroded, and filled with wax.
They could speak, but chose only to sing their horrendous song.
They most likely could taste, as they still had their tongues.
I kept my silence and watched the procession in silent fascination and subtle fear.
I watched as they all fell silent, before speaking a single word that I dare
not utter, for fear of that terrible darkness.
When they uttered that word, the symbols glowed bright.
All of them cowered in fear, but kept to their rites.
Soon, two great eyes appeared in the darkness and seemed to train on me.
Bound by fear, I could only watch as a screaming woman was brought forth.
What happened I dare not repeat.
Looking away, I broke the vice grip of fear and slowly walked away.
Though, the tortured screams still haunt me.
I kept my silent walk and did not panic when the BEING roared.
I did not panic when the woman uttered a scream that scarred my ears.
Never did I look back, fearing that if I did, the BEING would be there to do acts of unspeakable nature.
I simply walked, even when I felt a warm breeze blow from the bowels of the cavern. 'It is the breath of IT.'
My panicked mind roared, but I kept my course.
I found the exit, where the sunlight beat down upon me. I looked back to see the BEING bound in the cave by the light.
Doing the only sane thing, I filled the hole. Gods that be, never let it escape!"
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I was standing, the darkness of my room an absolute sea of black.
Was I in my room? Perhaps I was in another world, or maybe I was in a dream.
I listened closely. I heard my soft breathing and slowed my breath. Nothing. Then, a dripping sound.
Was it the Kitchen sink? Was it water dripping off a stalactite in an empty cave?
'Where... am I?' I asked myself. I took a step forward, suddenly aware of the soft, yet moist, floor.
I was barefoot. 'Who am I?' I asked suddenly. I knew that in popular culture this would be called Amnesia.
But amnesia was an inability to remember recent events.
'I'm intelligent.' I thought as I took a step forward. Was I in a bedroom, or a cave?
'Priorities.' I thought as I took a silent step forward. 'Location, Orientation, then Identity.'
It was a simple plan. I knelt down and felt the floor.
The floor was very malleable, I could easily tear it apart. Inside I felt worms and bugs of various design.
My stomach growled. 'I'm hungry.' I thought while considering the bugs.
Many were edible, while others were poisonous. Some could cause disease within my body.
'This is a cave.' I thought. A thought occured to me. A blind man's other senses were heightened in compensation for loss of sight.
'Perhaps I am blind, and this cave is well lit.' I thought. I made a click sound and the outlines of various shapes and crevices came to me.
I had 'sight'. I turned around and clicked again. I achieved a similar result. I faced my original direction and saw a subtle light.
I had Sight. I walked forward softly and slowly, clicking when needed. The air went past me once more, drawing me in the direction I walked.
Something clattered against my foot. I bent down and picked the object up.
It was a flashlight. I turned it on, procuring a powerful beam of light.
'If this were a horror game, the light would be weak.' My mind said.
I smiled softly as I walked forward, keeping my light in front of me.
Soon enough, I came to a large cavern. In the center was a large stalagmite.
(Or stalactite, I could never remember which was the one that extended from the floor up.)
Of the stala(ct/gm)ite there were strange symbols that hurt my eyes to look at.
I was aware of a strange song that hurt my ears to hear.
Men in black robes entered the cavern, singing the strange song, through various entrances and exits.
I heard some bits in what came to my ears as English.
"No bells toll for us, nor they do toll for our dead! Cast aside from light..."
The rest transitioned into the hurtful language.
However, I noted the appearance of the men.
They all were blind, their eyes gouged out and filled with wax.
They were deaf, their ears burnt severely and filled with wax.
They could not smell, for their noses were corroded, and filled with wax.
They could speak, but chose only to sing their horrendous song.
They most likely could taste, as they still had their tongues.
I kept my silence and watched the procession in silent fascination and subtle fear.
I watched as they all fell silent, before speaking a single word that I dare
not utter, for fear of that terrible darkness.
When they uttered that word, the symbols glowed bright.
All of them cowered in fear, but kept to their rites.
Soon, two great eyes appeared in the darkness and seemed to train on me.
Bound by fear, I could only watch as a screaming woman was brought forth.
What happened I dare not repeat.
Looking away, I broke the vice grip of fear and slowly walked away.
Though, the tortured screams still haunt me.
I kept my silent walk and did not panic when the BEING roared.
I did not panic when the woman uttered a scream that scarred my ears.
Never did I look back, fearing that if I did, the BEING would be there to do acts of unspeakable nature.
I simply walked, even when I felt a warm breeze blow from the bowels of the cavern. 'It is the breath of IT.'
My panicked mind roared, but I kept my course.
I found the exit, where the sunlight beat down upon me. I looked back to see the BEING bound in the cave by the light.
Doing the only sane thing, I filled the hole. Gods that be, never let it escape!"
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