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February 20th 2011, 01:08 PM
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Kyle
Peasant He/Him Belgium
 
"Rudy and Jack were preparing theirself" --- Theirself does not in fact exist in the English language, it's a very common error. Plus, you need a plural form. In this case it would be "themselves".

"they were greet with a horrible sight" --- Greeted by.

"The sky was still covered in somewhat of dark clouds and ash" --- leave out "somewhat of".

There's more, I'll see if I can spend some time on it tonight