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Hey everyone. I've been writing a book based on the game Wild ARMs (which I recommend you get now). I really haven't done that much for it, but I decided to post some of it (the prologue) here, for people to judge. Please, keep in mind I'm from Finland, so everything may not be perfect, however, if you have some criticism to give, please give constructive criticism, I do wish to get positive feedback more than criticism though. Hopefully you like it so I will. 
Without further ado, here's the prologue of my Wild ARMs book.
Chapter 1
The Fall Of The Fenril Knights
Snow covered the ground, and more was floating down from the sky, in the cold north of Filgaia, as three figures ran through the hallways of Arctica Castle. Escaping the fire that was raging all over the castle, the elder man, along with his three younger companions, stepped on an elevator which then started floating down while making a horrible grumbling sound.
The elder man, whom was surrounded by the other three, fell on his knees.
"I'm exhausted", he complained "Can't we slow down?!". The blue haired man turned towards him and responded: "There's nothing we can do as long as we are in the dark about their intentions.", he continued "Our duty as Fenril Knights is to protect the king".
"Preposterous", the elder man shouted as he got up, "I am the king, now that my brother has fallen! With or without a crown...". The blond young man to the right of the king spit on the elevator's floor: "...Huh! Then try to get out of here on your own!", he said.
"Stop that, Garrett! We are in the presence of the king!", the blue haired man turned towards the blond one, and looked at him with an angry expression on his face.
Suddenly, three giant bat-like creatures jumped on the elevator. The king crouched back onto his knees, while the three others pulled out their swords, and in three fast swings, there was nothing left of the monsters, but three corpses and blood.
"Bravo, Fenril Knights! Bravo!", the king yelled as he, once again, got back up. The other blond man, who had been quiet until this point, suddenly realized something terrible.
"A surprise attack within the snowstorm..." he muttered, "Maybe they're after...?!?!" he suddenly yelled. "Chief Coldbird, maybe the demons are after the cocoon?"
The blue haired man turned to face his companion. "The cocoon... It's a possibility", he thought, "Do you think the cocoon is worth something, Ryan?"
But before Ryan could get a word out from his lips, the king stated yelling: "What?! They came to get my cocoon?". He turned towards Chief Coldbird and begged him "No Coldbird! Do not let them take it! They'll use it for no good!!"
Silence spread, as the elevator continued to move down the castle. Only sound that could be heard within the next minutes was Garrett spitting on the elevator again. Suddenly, with another horrible grumbling sound, the elevator stopped, and a narrow bridge appeared so they could get off of the elevator.
They walked through the hallway, until they arrived in a bigger room. In the dark, you could barely make out the appearance of the room, which wasn't that great, with six torches, four statues of knights holding axes and a purple carpet. Two doors were to the left and right, on both sides of this long hallway-like room. All of the men's eyes were fixed on a giant cocoon, that was bound up to a hole in the wall.
They stepped into the room some more.
"Good. My cocoon is safe..." the king sighed out of relief.
Out from the right door limped a red haired young woman, whose leg was injured badly. Garrett noticed her. "Elmina!", she shouted. The woman walked over to him.
"Your leg...", Garrett gasped as he saw the damage on Elmina's leg. She chuckled: "Now I'm holding you back? Me, the *Sword Princess*?"
"Was the rest of your party...", but before she could even finish her sentence, Garrett and Ryan hung their head and admitted: "Yes..."
Suddenly, a long handled axe flew to the floor next to Ryan. He crouched, inspecting the axe. He grabbed it's wooden handle and in a flash of light, he disappeared into thin air along with the axe.
"Ryan!", Chief Coldbird yelled but it was too late. The king once again fell on his knees, yelling and moaning: "The knight... with a single stroke..."
Next to the king, in a flash, appeared an enormous figure. It had a head that looked like was made out of a golden crown, and it's body was covered in a white robe. It seemed to be floating in the thin air. The humans stood and watched as this creature, with paws the size of their heads started speaking: "Nice to meet you. I am the demon, Alhazad".
"But the demon race is only a legend?!", Elmina stepped from behind Garrett. The floating creature stared at Elmina: "And yet, here I am right in front of you", it continued "I don't have much time... so let me get to the point". It looked specifically towards the king as it yet again started speaking: "Will you give me that thing you call a cocoon?"
"Yes! Yes!", the king wailed as he crawled in front of the floating beast. "I'll do whatever you want! You can have anything. Just let me live".
Chief Coldbird, however, had no intentions of wailing, as he pulled out his sword and yelled: "No, your majesty! You must not do that!"
In a similar flash as when Ryan disappeared, so too did the king.
"I'm sorry", the creature who called itself demon Alhazad chuckled. "All I can give you in return is a *Painless Death*. You will have to live with it. Hee hee hee hee!", the demon joyed.
"You b*stard!!", Elmina shouted at Alhazad.
Chief Coldbird took a firmer grip of his sword as he yelled: "Garrett! Elmina! You must escape from Arctica Castle! Let everyone in Filgaia know what has happened here!" He then launched towards the demon in white robes, as Garrett and Elmina ran out from the right door. All they could see and hear was a horrible grinding of metal and a huge flash.
Garrett and Elmina found themselves sitting on another purple carpet, in a hallway. They sat down as Garrett bound a ribbon around Elmina's injured leg.
"D*mn, our chief is..." Elmina cursed, "That b*stard probably got the rest of the knights too". They sat there for a while.
"Hey, Garrett", Elmina suddenly spoke. "You're a bigger coward than I thought". Garrett shook his head: "What?! What are you saying?! Me, a coward?"
"Yes", Elmina spoke, "You have no *Courage*. You're probably thinking of a way to defeat them even now". Garrett got back on his feet.
"Of course!" he yelled, "No matter what it takes, I'll kill that thing!"
Elmina stood up next to Garrett: "So, you call throwing your life away *Courage*? We will not be able to defeat them yet". She looked at Garrett's annoyed expression. "I know it's hard to admit".
Elmina noticed some blood on Garrett's arm, and bound a ribbon around it. "What a terrible wound", she muffled. Garrett looked at her leg and responded: "It's not as bad as yours".
"I won't hear of it!". she said as she let go of his arm. She continued: "You think fighting an unbeatable enemy is *Courage*? I don't agree with that".
"So, what do you consider *Courage*?", Garrett shot back.
"Enough chattering", Elmina stopped, "Let's go, Garrett!"
They started moving towards the end of the hallway, where a door to the cold blizzard was waiting. Some snow had even come through the holes in the wooden gate, and now covered the floor of the castle. In his hurry, Garrett didn't notice the the limping Elmina, left behind. As he went through the gate, he could hear it shut down. Garrett turned towards the gate and stuck his head between one of the holes.
"What are you doing, Elmina?!", Garrett yelled from the blizzard. Elmina looked at him. "I can't get away with this wound!", she yelled back.
Garrett was trying to convince her: "Open the door elmina! You're the one who said wasting your life is not *Courage*!". Elmina hung her head: "Funny for me to say, but you gain nothing from war". She looked down to the floor. "But Garrett", she continued, "I fight to protect something important to me. I will not gain anything, but I will not lose anything." Protecting something important is not a waste of life". She took a deep breath: "Garrett, I don't want to lose you".
"Nor I you!", Garrett shouted, "Open the door, Elmina! I'll fight with you! Open the door, Elmina!". Elmina lifted her head: "You must tell the world what has happened here... Don't worry. I have no intention of dying here. I am the Sword Princess. The ribbon I wrapped around your arm was expensive... I can't die until I get that back".
In an already familiar flash of light, Alhazad appeared floating in front of Elmina. "There you are. You were hard to find", he said with his metallic, yet hissing, voice, "You are the last humans in the castle. Are you ready to die?". Elmina, with her hair flowing in the wind that pushed through the gate, pulled out her sword, and stood between the gate and Alhazad.
"Have *Courage*!", she yelled to Garrett, "Deliver the Fenril Spirit to our friends! Run Garrett! You can overcome anything!"
Garret struggled to say "I promise... I will return... your ribbon". But he couldn't run. He backed away slowly, and heard Alhazad say the most demonic sentences, he had ever heard: "It's a dead end. There's no way out. Hee hee hee hee hee... You are noble and beautiful. Can't you see? My body is trembling with joy". He saw Elmina walk towards Alhazad, but the blizzard got deadly.
He ran as fast as he could, through the snow and ice, only to fall down time after another. As he struggled to get away from the burning castle, little did he know, that inside the castle, a huge man with a metallic body and a red cape, was watching the cocoon slowly beat. Alhazad was floating right next to him. Slowly, the cocoon continued to beat like a giant's heart.
Several years pass...
Without further ado, here's the prologue of my Wild ARMs book.
Chapter 1
The Fall Of The Fenril Knights
Snow covered the ground, and more was floating down from the sky, in the cold north of Filgaia, as three figures ran through the hallways of Arctica Castle. Escaping the fire that was raging all over the castle, the elder man, along with his three younger companions, stepped on an elevator which then started floating down while making a horrible grumbling sound.
The elder man, whom was surrounded by the other three, fell on his knees.
"I'm exhausted", he complained "Can't we slow down?!". The blue haired man turned towards him and responded: "There's nothing we can do as long as we are in the dark about their intentions.", he continued "Our duty as Fenril Knights is to protect the king".
"Preposterous", the elder man shouted as he got up, "I am the king, now that my brother has fallen! With or without a crown...". The blond young man to the right of the king spit on the elevator's floor: "...Huh! Then try to get out of here on your own!", he said.
"Stop that, Garrett! We are in the presence of the king!", the blue haired man turned towards the blond one, and looked at him with an angry expression on his face.
Suddenly, three giant bat-like creatures jumped on the elevator. The king crouched back onto his knees, while the three others pulled out their swords, and in three fast swings, there was nothing left of the monsters, but three corpses and blood.
"Bravo, Fenril Knights! Bravo!", the king yelled as he, once again, got back up. The other blond man, who had been quiet until this point, suddenly realized something terrible.
"A surprise attack within the snowstorm..." he muttered, "Maybe they're after...?!?!" he suddenly yelled. "Chief Coldbird, maybe the demons are after the cocoon?"
The blue haired man turned to face his companion. "The cocoon... It's a possibility", he thought, "Do you think the cocoon is worth something, Ryan?"
But before Ryan could get a word out from his lips, the king stated yelling: "What?! They came to get my cocoon?". He turned towards Chief Coldbird and begged him "No Coldbird! Do not let them take it! They'll use it for no good!!"
Silence spread, as the elevator continued to move down the castle. Only sound that could be heard within the next minutes was Garrett spitting on the elevator again. Suddenly, with another horrible grumbling sound, the elevator stopped, and a narrow bridge appeared so they could get off of the elevator.
They walked through the hallway, until they arrived in a bigger room. In the dark, you could barely make out the appearance of the room, which wasn't that great, with six torches, four statues of knights holding axes and a purple carpet. Two doors were to the left and right, on both sides of this long hallway-like room. All of the men's eyes were fixed on a giant cocoon, that was bound up to a hole in the wall.
They stepped into the room some more.
"Good. My cocoon is safe..." the king sighed out of relief.
Out from the right door limped a red haired young woman, whose leg was injured badly. Garrett noticed her. "Elmina!", she shouted. The woman walked over to him.
"Your leg...", Garrett gasped as he saw the damage on Elmina's leg. She chuckled: "Now I'm holding you back? Me, the *Sword Princess*?"
"Was the rest of your party...", but before she could even finish her sentence, Garrett and Ryan hung their head and admitted: "Yes..."
Suddenly, a long handled axe flew to the floor next to Ryan. He crouched, inspecting the axe. He grabbed it's wooden handle and in a flash of light, he disappeared into thin air along with the axe.
"Ryan!", Chief Coldbird yelled but it was too late. The king once again fell on his knees, yelling and moaning: "The knight... with a single stroke..."
Next to the king, in a flash, appeared an enormous figure. It had a head that looked like was made out of a golden crown, and it's body was covered in a white robe. It seemed to be floating in the thin air. The humans stood and watched as this creature, with paws the size of their heads started speaking: "Nice to meet you. I am the demon, Alhazad".
"But the demon race is only a legend?!", Elmina stepped from behind Garrett. The floating creature stared at Elmina: "And yet, here I am right in front of you", it continued "I don't have much time... so let me get to the point". It looked specifically towards the king as it yet again started speaking: "Will you give me that thing you call a cocoon?"
"Yes! Yes!", the king wailed as he crawled in front of the floating beast. "I'll do whatever you want! You can have anything. Just let me live".
Chief Coldbird, however, had no intentions of wailing, as he pulled out his sword and yelled: "No, your majesty! You must not do that!"
In a similar flash as when Ryan disappeared, so too did the king.
"I'm sorry", the creature who called itself demon Alhazad chuckled. "All I can give you in return is a *Painless Death*. You will have to live with it. Hee hee hee hee!", the demon joyed.
"You b*stard!!", Elmina shouted at Alhazad.
Chief Coldbird took a firmer grip of his sword as he yelled: "Garrett! Elmina! You must escape from Arctica Castle! Let everyone in Filgaia know what has happened here!" He then launched towards the demon in white robes, as Garrett and Elmina ran out from the right door. All they could see and hear was a horrible grinding of metal and a huge flash.
Garrett and Elmina found themselves sitting on another purple carpet, in a hallway. They sat down as Garrett bound a ribbon around Elmina's injured leg.
"D*mn, our chief is..." Elmina cursed, "That b*stard probably got the rest of the knights too". They sat there for a while.
"Hey, Garrett", Elmina suddenly spoke. "You're a bigger coward than I thought". Garrett shook his head: "What?! What are you saying?! Me, a coward?"
"Yes", Elmina spoke, "You have no *Courage*. You're probably thinking of a way to defeat them even now". Garrett got back on his feet.
"Of course!" he yelled, "No matter what it takes, I'll kill that thing!"
Elmina stood up next to Garrett: "So, you call throwing your life away *Courage*? We will not be able to defeat them yet". She looked at Garrett's annoyed expression. "I know it's hard to admit".
Elmina noticed some blood on Garrett's arm, and bound a ribbon around it. "What a terrible wound", she muffled. Garrett looked at her leg and responded: "It's not as bad as yours".
"I won't hear of it!". she said as she let go of his arm. She continued: "You think fighting an unbeatable enemy is *Courage*? I don't agree with that".
"So, what do you consider *Courage*?", Garrett shot back.
"Enough chattering", Elmina stopped, "Let's go, Garrett!"
They started moving towards the end of the hallway, where a door to the cold blizzard was waiting. Some snow had even come through the holes in the wooden gate, and now covered the floor of the castle. In his hurry, Garrett didn't notice the the limping Elmina, left behind. As he went through the gate, he could hear it shut down. Garrett turned towards the gate and stuck his head between one of the holes.
"What are you doing, Elmina?!", Garrett yelled from the blizzard. Elmina looked at him. "I can't get away with this wound!", she yelled back.
Garrett was trying to convince her: "Open the door elmina! You're the one who said wasting your life is not *Courage*!". Elmina hung her head: "Funny for me to say, but you gain nothing from war". She looked down to the floor. "But Garrett", she continued, "I fight to protect something important to me. I will not gain anything, but I will not lose anything." Protecting something important is not a waste of life". She took a deep breath: "Garrett, I don't want to lose you".
"Nor I you!", Garrett shouted, "Open the door, Elmina! I'll fight with you! Open the door, Elmina!". Elmina lifted her head: "You must tell the world what has happened here... Don't worry. I have no intention of dying here. I am the Sword Princess. The ribbon I wrapped around your arm was expensive... I can't die until I get that back".
In an already familiar flash of light, Alhazad appeared floating in front of Elmina. "There you are. You were hard to find", he said with his metallic, yet hissing, voice, "You are the last humans in the castle. Are you ready to die?". Elmina, with her hair flowing in the wind that pushed through the gate, pulled out her sword, and stood between the gate and Alhazad.
"Have *Courage*!", she yelled to Garrett, "Deliver the Fenril Spirit to our friends! Run Garrett! You can overcome anything!"
Garret struggled to say "I promise... I will return... your ribbon". But he couldn't run. He backed away slowly, and heard Alhazad say the most demonic sentences, he had ever heard: "It's a dead end. There's no way out. Hee hee hee hee hee... You are noble and beautiful. Can't you see? My body is trembling with joy". He saw Elmina walk towards Alhazad, but the blizzard got deadly.
He ran as fast as he could, through the snow and ice, only to fall down time after another. As he struggled to get away from the burning castle, little did he know, that inside the castle, a huge man with a metallic body and a red cape, was watching the cocoon slowly beat. Alhazad was floating right next to him. Slowly, the cocoon continued to beat like a giant's heart.
Several years pass...
