The Dink Network

133

Was the point of view change from 1st person to 3rd person intentional?

I like your story, but I'd suggest keeping it first person - it has more urgency, more intimacy, and connects with the reader far better - IMHO.

Good points. And I liked them. Thank you. I may do that but Mack keeps trying to talk. I might have to go back and change it all to interactive characters. Have you read it all?
Curious.
Anyone else?

PS I think first person is more intimate also. I chose it for that reason and the reader feels the story teller is talking to them.

Wow...that was really well-written. Great job Desertgrl. You should write for a D-Mod.

Sincerely,
The Vault Dweller

P.S.

Glad it wasnt a journal entry...thats what I thought it was at first.